Poemranker [Replying] Thu Nov 21 20:37:46 PST 2024

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i was left standing, by myself, holding hands with the air the bleak moon stared down upon me and seeing that i was a solitary figure, stood aside and let me be. i watched slowly as days went by, fluttering past at an alarming rate. my life is going by, i'm not noticing i'm noticing nothing but you indirect emotion lingering on your breath you didn't know what to say

horus8

28-Dec-02/12:18 PM

sure, i'd love to..'dada', (i don't know if i'm spelling it correctly),
is poetry in a artistic shape that works on maby levels within the readers psyche, but i can give you a better example. a poem i wrote called hey, shut up and cut my grass. z wrote one shaped like a penis..but i don't think that dada is even necisarily applicable to this poetic situation, let me do an edit, try this.

i was left standing,
by myself holding hands
with the air, the bleak
moon stared down upon me
and seeing that i was a
solitary figure, stood
aside and let me be.

I watched slowly as days
went by, fluttering past
at an alarming rate.
my life is going by
too, i'm noticing nothing
but you, indirect emotion
lingering on your breath
you didn't know
what to say
so you didn't
say anything.a

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