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sleep at 2:24 (Haiku) by blackball

you felt me captured again the sun exploded they lost another

Bachus 6-Dec-02/11:53 AM
even at 2:24 typos like that fuck up the poem like a monkey wrench. change i to they in increases self involvement by pretending to shy away from it.f




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