Replying to a comment on:

Holy Spirit - A Tanka Poem (Haiku) by amanda_dcosta

Lover of my soul Delightful pleasure You bring Everyday I wait Make my spirit rise with You I live to dwell in Your love. Tanka meter: 5-7-5-7-7

nypoet22 16-Sep-10/1:07 AM
i like the form, and the last line. the rest, however, needs work in my view. the adjectives are standard.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001