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Sunset Beach (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

Let me paint you a picture in hues of purple and pink or maybe in orange or crimson with splashes of spice and peach. A touch of turquoise and tan could transform our dreary world into lovely walks along the sand as ocean waves unfurl. Seagulls in shades of white dive into the foamy surf to capture the shiny silvers that dwell below the swirls. The cotton candy clouds float across the flawless face of a serene summer day through golden sunlit rays. And here my scene unfolds as two souls they walk the sands of a dreamy paradise in the perfect lover's world..

amanda_dcosta 4-Jun-07/8:02 PM
Hey, hey, hey... good to see you around. Thanks for the critique. Pearly white is much better than pearly whites..... or I've been thinking of even rephrasing it

Seagulls feathered white
dive into the foamy surf
to capture the shining silvers
that dwell below the swirls.

This might sound better. What do you think?




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