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To Love One Another (Free verse) by Sunshine Conkey

To love one another, is to become one You start and finish what one has begun; You perspire tears and choke on sweat You can't afford to get stuck in the net; Of things to come that still seem the same And to each of us, the other is to blame; To listen to our thoughts, to read the need Learning that days to come aren't just a deed; Do onto others, as they do onto you Isn't just a commandment thrown onto you; It's the simple way any love should know It's what we need to help us grow; We should stop rebelling if things aren't going our way, And stop controlling each and every day; If we work together to make things right Maybe we can end these rediculous fights; They were right to say the best things in life are free, And that is the love, between you and me... **actually written by a friend~Michael**

amanda_dcosta 24-Nov-06/8:37 AM
First of all, I see that you mentioned its someone else's poem. So, am not sure if I should grade it.

Apart from that its a nice sentiment, very true, but with spelling errors.




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