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Prayer (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

I wait on the Lord, morning and night would I call on Him, I search,I seek answers to my questions… And then like the rush of the stormy winds He quenches, fills the void of empty soul: torrents of love and grace. He spoke in the stillness of my heart.

Ranger 21-Sep-06/12:31 AM
Hey Amanda, sorry I've not yet replied to your email. I will though, bear with me!

This seems very much like a short psalm; lyrical and dramatic. I'd split line 2 into two (finish on 'night'), and finish line 3 on something other than '-ing' (give it a word with a strong ending). Still nice, needs music methinks :-)




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