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I'm Learning To Drive (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

I’m sitting at the wheel. The rain clouds storm the heavens while the trees sway about, accompanying the drum beats of thunder. He’s there in my vehicle an observant understanding instructor, Watching my every move, eyes fixed on the road he commands… ‘Left indicator, brakes a little, clutch and first gear, move on slowly… there’s a hump ahead press the clutch and shift to two, accelerate a bit, if you’re confident, shift your gears to three and speed on’. And so I do. I shift to the fourth, speed away, ever confident that I know it all and forgets he’s there. The thrill of being in control envelops my senses. I’m transferred to a world of my own, till I come to a junction; the rain’s pouring down and I don’t know how to stop, when he suddenly presses the brakes.. and then I realize he’s got the controls on his side too, and I’m saved in the nick of time. Lord, how could I forget You’re in control of my life? I’m glad you are.

Dovina 16-Jul-06/5:58 PM
My comment on the deleted one was a bit snide: “I'm sorry you said, near the end, that the car has dual controls. Up to there I imagined you on his lap in a fine rainy day romp along an Indian lane.”

Striving this time to inflict wounds of a friend, please take a few goddess stabs at an angel:

Trees sway.
The heavens storm.
I’m sitting at the wheel,
driving to drum beats of thunder
while the instructor watches.
‘Left indicator, brake a little,’
he commands…
I clutch and find first gear,
move on slowly… there’s a hump ahead
clutch again and shift to two,
accelerate a bit,
almost confident, I shift to three
and speed on.
I shift to the fourth,
speed away,
confident now, I forget he’s there.
I thrill at being in control,
transferred to a world of my own,
till I come to a junction;
the rain’s pouring,
and I don’t know how to stop.
My instructor suddenly presses
the brakes..
and then I realize
he’s got the controls
on his side too,
and I’m saved in the nick of time.

Lord, how could I forget
You’re in control of my life?




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