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These Past Sixteen Months (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

You'd call it hell. I choose to call it refining. Loved ones around me die, One after another, Two of them very dear to me. And then the next... Suffers from a stroke That affects his life forever. Paralyzed, Dreams shattered, Soul depressed. The list goes on. One has a tumor, Another cancer... Terminally ill is how they define her. Still further, an accident That claims a life. Nightmares, confusion and the like. We've grown. Flown out of their nest. Distance separates us In four continents. Yet... I choose to hold firm No matter the cost, To the only comfort The one on the cross... Unfathomable love Ever quenching Spirit Abiding presence! I run my race I stand my ground. Tho' storm clouds blow o'er me, I'm safe in His arms.

amanda_dcosta 6-Apr-06/10:55 PM
Very constructive critisism. Thanks. I agree I should do a lot more proof reading and editing on this. And the " o'er ", maybe I could reword it over.

As for the four continent verse.... it was part of the trying time I had to deal with... part of which was also due to the events mentioned in the verse before this.

On the whole, the whole description of this poem is about my distress and anxiety, one which I am able to handle through faith.




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