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Because You Love Me (Lyric) by amanda_dcosta

It's waking hours. I walk aimlessly Wondering where my steps would lead me. When I hear your voice whisper to me That you love me. It's not aimless any more My steps progress And my day begins All because you say you love me. No matter what I do during the day No matter where I go; the road I take Hand in hand with you my love, You make my day, Because you love me.

Dovina 30-Mar-06/2:03 PM
I think "Waking Hours" would make a better title than a first line.
Comma after "aimlessly"
Comma after "me"
Period after "more"
Comma after "go"




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