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Time Will Change (Free verse) by x0lovelylarnx0

Time will change like the leaves on a tree Love will come and go But you will soon be set free Life will go on like a slow ticking clock Your heart will take a different beat But life won't be the same until you knock You will hear someone answer with a mighty voice God will come into your heart to live forever But in the end it's God's choice

amanda_dcosta 28-Mar-06/10:55 AM
This is good. But I would rather you modify the last line a bit. Some thing like, 'if only you will let him in.'

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