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Nomads (Haiku) by amanda_dcosta

Wandering birds Flying in the sky so high Oh! Tell me where

LilMsLadyPoet 2-Feb-06/8:26 AM
Ranger, I believe they are supposed to. 5-7-5
and some have a - afer the 2nd. line.
Are the birds wandering or flying?
'in the sky so high'...uhm...needs work.
Concept> birds, flying, "Oh tell me where" great ending to that concept, but add one necessary word, to make 5 syllables.




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