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Just Shut Up! Everyone Just Shut Up! (Ode) by MacFrantic

or "An Ode to My Idiot Relatives" Oh how your creeping Meatballism sings to me A chorus of many dunces United in brazen melody What for has this arisen That we should not share An affinity but of blood Much less civil than fair So let us just sit here Amongst all the guests And listen to whose Drunken diatribe sounds best

amanda_dcosta 29-Jan-06/3:58 AM
By the way, I wonder who this freak is - voting a -0- without commenting, on quite a lot of poems, one after another. I couldn't help but notice it, and was curious to know why. You have a rival.....pass him on to me.... he needs a dose of some 'happy pills'.

that said, your piece is pretty good, considering you want to describe relatives the way you did. My point however would be the title.... "an ode to my Idiotic Relatives". Might not make a difference, but that's what I felt as soon as I read it. Just a matter of opinion!




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