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For such is a child’s heart (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

The children play, they’re in the field. Smiles on their faces, innocence. All nature stops to watch and see Such joy, such fun, such radiance! For such is a child’s heart. They toss the ball, beckon and call Each other funny names, while The sunshine bright, a wondrous sight Wants to join in their games. For such is a child’s heart. And when to bed tucked in at night Faces aglow, hearts satisfied, Creator God smiles radiantly On such pure childhood ecstasy. For such is a child’s heart.

Ranger 29-Jan-06/3:58 AM
Personally I'd change the first line, give it a little more lyricism; this is a nice enough piece, but read out loud it is somewhat too bulky (for me, anyway). There's definitely potential here, I just feel it needs a couple of edits while being read aloud.




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