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I love to see the sunrise (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

I love to see the sunrise And the dawn of each new day. For, there's surprises all around And things to do and say. Yesterday's gone, I lived it through With joy and work and mistakes too. And when a new day thus begins I see the steps my life's taken. I look at all that i have done, The pain I've given anyone, And then begin my mending plan Through remorse and a helping hand. I love to see the sunrise And the dawn of each new day. There's hope and love and a beautiful start To all the dreams within my heart.

Dovina 16-Dec-05/11:38 AM
A nice, light poem with good rhythm. But again I must take exception to lines that add nothing new or do not say what you mean.

These, at least:
"And things to do and say."
"Through remorse and a helping hand." I doubt if you mean "remorse".




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