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I'm walking thorough void (Other) by Prince of Void

I'm walking thorough void My steps are soundless What's left behind? It's turning into way its pace less In final thoughts I became breathless In this eternity destiny is worthless In this moment everything is nameless Death has no dominion What you have learnt It's useless in the depth of staring void Darkness I'm in is fearless Because it fills this empty universe My voice is voiceless Due to words became meaningless Slowly I'm getting faceless Because my identity has been questionable When I've seen things unspeakable My existence My sin {love} My sense They're endlessly traceless And my quest for the placeless god It's incomplete in the pathless heart

wilco 1-Dec-05/2:48 PM
ummm...okay, first, you need to move on from the whole "void" angle. It's wearing thin. Also, try some different styles and variations. Either get some prozac or some liquor (but just enough). Most of the good stuff is about pain and depression, but you need to work on saying it in a new way and making it interesting. Also work on your grammar and adjectives. Often, your lines make little sense because you're trying to put too much into them.




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