Replying to a comment on:
Katrina
(
Free verse
) by
jessicazee
The hurricane is a galaxy on TV The bayou folk ride alligators with charms and hexes Dead bodies float or sink the Civil War veterans The quarter is French submerged a truly sea level A levee breaks just like the song calamity, a wet
wilco
1-Sep-05/5:56 PM
I'd lose the fifth stanza. We don't need a Zeppelin reference. Lose the The in the fourth stanza and your pretty good.
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