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March 3,2005/I lost someone (Free verse) by RION12

March 3,2005 This is the day I lost a family member. I don't even think I know him. Tears fall down my face. As I lay in bed in my dark room. I hear nothing, not even me breathing. I am motionless, I cover my self with a blacket. I lay there still motionless and scared. I lay on my bed. I listen to some very soft and sad music. I get up to write poetry but this poem is all I got of me. I just stand there. I let go of myself. I fall to the floor and once again I am motionless. *Note* My couisn really did die and I wrote this poem to express a lot of feelings I don't like to express. I would just like to say this poem is to him. To Danny my second cousin. R.I.P Danny

Stephen Robins 4-Mar-05/8:06 AM
I know it is in bad taste to say something when your clearly aching with sorrow over the loss of your second cousin but this poem just lacks something, I can't put my finger on it but it will come to me...




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