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Ash (Lyric) by horus8

There is a place, I often go A burnt down house, outside of town Ring of trees, scarred and bent Laughing children, now absent Foundation left like bones for rain Nothing earned, and nothing gained Mailbox tilted to face the ground The far off bark of a Blood-hound An Ash tree, initialed, full of crows My heart, and hers, black with arrow.

INTRANSIT 2-Nov-04/5:43 AM
I have the same problem with 2 words in the first stanza of my poem " Dear Lord". It may come to rebuilding the damn thing from the ground up. at least the first stanza.




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