poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Ash by horus8.

INTRANSIT2 Nov 2004

Ok bro. You're so fucking close!!!!!!!!
Line 4 (absent) is too fast a word
Line 8 is one beat off.
There are no other problems that I can hear.
I'm gonna slap you with a ten 'cos I know how hard it is to fix details like these.