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Buried at Sea (Free verse) by brazen

Broken waves, Shattered by steel, Stolen echoes, Scattered at its heal, Rocking gently, In my Mother's arms, Saftely nestled, On a burden of harms. I find joy fleating, Beneath a sea of rocks, I lose myself unwilling, Behind a door with no locks, I see no misfits caring, Believing all ships are in their docks.

Bachus 24-Aug-02/10:23 PM
check lines 4,7, to fix typos "heal", should be "heel" and "saftetly" should be well you know...just looking out for you bros..editor's advice is golden...




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