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Rapid Eye Movement (Free verse) by wilco

Harsh words and strained voices aside, there will be no pain in the eventual cease-fire of sleep. Nothing makes the night seem lonely like the soft fluttering in her shuttered eyes. In color schemes of shadow black her silhouette groans and turns and returns to silent slumber.

SupremeDreamer 25-Aug-04/6:52 AM
Mostly like it, specially the first stanza, the ending felt somewhat abrupt though. Blessed with nine.




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