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Southern Mississippii Standstill (Other) by wilco

Arms draped like willows, Althea caught the sunbeams laughing at the tide. She chased them across wide fields of ecru grasses until the stars grew. When they turned their shine away from her smiling face, fireflies were left. Eyes closed like cave-ins, Althea caught the sunbeams falling across dreams.

richa 16-Jul-04/1:32 PM
Very pretty, like the feign of line two to three on the first verse. No need for full stops after each verse.




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