wilco11 Jun 2004

First, thanks for the critique and I think (hope) that the writers block has been lifted.

Second, you're right about the little things...just a little problem I have (as discussed with Shin Shuu somewhere on this page. I've got to work on that.

Third, with the last sentence, i just couldn't get it to sound right putting the 'she' in there.

Fourth, I was just happy not to get a "Personally, I honestly don't think you'll ever be any good at writing poetry. Poets are born not made. You can improve, but only so far. You're poetically tone deaf."

That stings.

But I'll keep your suggestions in mind, for sure...and thanks.