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The Folded Ways Your Eyes Cave (Villanelle) by horus8

I can show you why, but I cannot save You from yourself, and The folded ways your eyes cave. Dead ending lies, and flies, and skies pave Me a brickroad over a No Man's land I can show you why, but I cannot save. You thought I was going to beg and crave Well guess again, because I cannot stand The folded ways your eyes cave. I watched madness sweep you up in its wave That was not expected; Not what you planned? I can show you why, but I cannot save. You found such pleasure in the pain you gave Out by the second, wasn't it grand? The folded ways your eyes cave. What began as love forced me to slave Away at the image of what was at hand I can show you why, but I cannot save The folded ways your eyes cave.

pain killer 2-Jun-04/2:17 PM
the folded way your eyes cave...you really like thaat line don't you..really proud of that one....so good you used it four times




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