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Catharsis (Triolet) by wilco

Three flights of stairs and a bottle of wine upwards into her apartment. Walking with fingers intertwined up three flights of stairs and a bottle of wine. Her eyes are beaming, I'm closing mine and contemplating a swift descent. Three flights of stairs and a bottle of wine upwards into her apartment.

Shuushin 22-May-04/12:35 PM
Yep, thats a good one; good use of the form.

Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood.

the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well.

when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?





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