Losing Control

Member since 2004 · Posted 29 Apr 2004 · 11 comments

Holding onto the last regret I may have, Ill bring this cancer to my lips, These cravings cause this wrath, And these hands are here to save me. Rough, cut and drawn upon, Holding a cigarette between my thumbs, A symbol of everything, That is always going wrong In one hand I hold a gun The other the always obvious Easier way out, And I suck in This air that you frown upon As I fall to the ground I reach out Trying to save myself, and I catch This fall with my hands, I land on my palms The gun falls to my side, This cancer is finally lost. Looking, searching, barely conscious, I see your face, and I reach out to touch You back away, I suppose no one Could ever understand this much. Take my answers tossing them to the side Holding my body, I can read your eyes Pain fills my heart, and sorrow my soul When I feel you reaching into These hands that lost control.

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[8] nothingtoanyone 29-Apr-04/5:59 PM Reply

The hands that save you are the same ones that destroy you nice...

[7] zodiac › nothingtoanyone 1-May-04/8:14 AM Reply

I propose that any theme which can be formulated X = -X is nice. If poemranker ever becomes a literary movement - and I've no doubt it will - it will be characterized by its endless and increasingly unrealistic iterations of X = -X themes. Mark my words.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 1-May-04/8:43 AM Reply

Much better are propositions of the form "P, but I don't believe that P."

[7] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-04/8:50 AM Reply

"I should X, but I don't."

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 1-May-04/8:56 AM Reply

"You're gay, but X"

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-04/8:59 AM Reply

"You're gay" <-> (((P -> Q) -> P) -> P)

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 1-May-04/8:59 AM Reply

Furthermore, buncombe. Mine is Moore's Paradox. Yours is Zodiac's Utter Failure.

[7] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-04/9:08 AM Reply

Whatever. X = -X is by far the most frequently-occuring poemranker theme. Yours, while interesting, is hugely outnumbered and fails.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-04/9:31 AM Reply

Moore's Proof of the existence of an external world:

- expose your right buttock
- say "here is a buttock"
- expose your left buttock
- say "here is a buttock"
- it follows that there are at least two material objects in the world
- so there is an external world
- QED

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-04/10:17 AM Reply

Surely it's sufficient merely to expose a single buttock, thus proving that there are at least two things (myself and my buttock), and therefore that there are things external to myself.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-May-04/10:47 AM Reply

yes but anything that is not a buttock might be an illusion; just read http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/G._E._Moore if you don't believe me.