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Who king in selfish selves (Free verse) by waxtester
Who king in selfish selves,
that through our hearts, make ourselves.
In lack of better knowing,
the know is lost in the now,
and the now in the know.
Which is the feeling of
a deity missing.
The pointing strait at "The"
who is painted on every unforgotten heart
misplaced behind the ribs
when it belongs in the soul
which bends its likeness to
whatever simple, not in skill
but faith, which is to seem
a yellow sign with an
artists (WARNING!)
(Now eyes of faith are blindly
opened to Him who is true, Who is power, Who is right)
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7816
Posted: April 20, 2004 6:18 PM PDT; Last modified: April 20, 2004 6:18 PM PDT
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Some good thoughts here, but a bit disjointed.
Like why not "Who is king in selfish selves?" or is that too simple; I don't think so.
The part about know and now is good.
"The" is vague in an uninteresting way.