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Temporal (Free verse) by Shardik
Leaning upon the newel I followed you down circular Out into the square There was a burst of birds A quickening of step A nuance of eternal chances and the surety of rain. I saw a man near a statue Steam pounced from his face Up and out against the Azure He had a paper, and it had him There was a clock looming And shadows curling through vista The river, black, snaked in daylight. You were singing of Summer You were barely chest high A basket of fresh bread hooked from your arm, rubbed at your side Top buttons open, periwinkle dress - - cascading about your pale ankles You smelled of Vanilla and morning. I stayed behind you 'till the bridge And that is where I let you go.

Up the ladder: Feudal Conflict
Down the ladder: Bashing through the woods

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.625
Weighted score: 5.7059712
Overall Rank: 1930
Posted: April 17, 2004 1:18 AM PDT; Last modified: April 17, 2004 1:18 AM PDT
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[10] zodiac @ 67.240.155.57 | 17-Apr-04/6:41 AM | Reply
Hot damn!
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 17-Apr-04/9:21 AM | Reply
something here stumps me:
"And shadows curling through vista
The river, black, snaked in daylight."

captital v on vanilla?

even with those nits - a rockin 9
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