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in perspective (Free verse) by That One Snap i will
running in circles~
Burn myself
Decomposed in the end
closed door closed windows
Broken glass encompassing
Guilt trip blame me. Sabotage.
Cut for the sole purpose of serving you
An endless waltz
Up the ladder:
I Love You Mildred Rogers No Matter What
Down the ladder:
Gale of Death (Paradelle)
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Posted: April 12, 2004 11:41 PM PDT; Last modified: April 12, 2004 11:41 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8671 Comments:
A bit disjointed and unfocused it seems. Could do without the last line.
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The pace is what you seem to be going for, but it does seem a bit cobbled together.