Poemranker [Poem: Starving] [by ifni] Thu Nov 21 14:07:10 PST 2024

Starving (Free verse) by ifni

I watch without watching; smile without smirking; bathe in the warm glow of your joy, starving. Your joy resounds, and while shaken, I find myself painless - just hungry, deprived of my dreams. And so, I know - my love is just hunger, my lust just a wishful thought, my desire is for normalcy, not you. lying to myself, again. What other way to know no hate/pain/fear? 3.5.2002 JV

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Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10027

Posted: April 10, 2002 11:46 PM PDT; Last modified: September 17, 2002 8:32 AM PDT
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[8] nentwined @ | 12-Apr-02/5:19 PM | Reply

I was *so* glad you said "smile without smirking" instead of "smile without smiling".

Overall, beautiful. I didn't like "your joy resounds" -- it didn't feel like it went with the rest of the poem.

[10] searching @ | 14-Apr-02/3:11 PM | Reply

I relate to the message in this poem completely - thanks so much for penning companionship in this mode of thought - Searching

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