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dying love (Free verse) by singinkygal
One day I loved you, the next it was gone I used to love your company now I just want to be alone I used to be attentive and hang on to every word now I find myself tuning you out and have barely listened to or heard your I love yous your I need yous How do I tell you what you already know you've noticed a change in me you told me so I'm sorry, I can't tell you why All I know is I have to say good bye Take care have a wonderful life sounds so cold those words can cut like a knife I do wish you well and though we'll be apart I will cherish the short time you held my heart. I did love you one day until it was gone

Up the ladder: matador
Down the ladder: Soft Speak; Hard Emotion

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.142857
Weighted score: 5.3073616
Overall Rank: 3638
Posted: March 29, 2004 11:05 AM PST; Last modified: March 29, 2004 11:05 AM PST
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Comments:
[5] deleted user @ 68.169.177.107 | 29-Mar-04/11:23 AM | Reply
Try this as a short story, it might work better.
[6] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 29-Mar-04/5:26 PM | Reply
Needs to stand out from this very crowded "lost love" room.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 30-Mar-04/4:16 AM | Reply
A cursed clam packed with bile.
[8] sliver @ 63.190.72.100 | 5-Sep-04/4:48 PM | Reply
Sometimes separation is the only avenue.
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