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thaw (Free verse) by JakeBike
Walking past the ice-logged dam
I catch that heady smell coming off the ledge:
wet earth swollen with velevt flesh,
a welling promise amidst all this mess, this melt.
I lift my eyes to rounding mounds of exploding growth
tumefying like bonsai'd mountains, forested dense.
Green and sweet, it speaks to me of softness, so
I press against its pile, flatten gently,
test for spring.
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5908
Posted: March 23, 2004 9:27 PM PST; Last modified: March 23, 2004 9:27 PM PST
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i particularly like tumefying because the sound of it suggests more than its meaning.