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Dissenting voice (Free verse) by richa 'To grow old on sartre and fishing
for the heaviest trout, is not done
you will learn;
wisdom will encroach on belief '.
But I will show them, build a wall
high as a statue,
not let 'that the stone rolls' encroach
as I strum in my cell. Should the wall
ever come down
and I hold the hand of my enemy.
I am nothing.
Up the ladder:
Wonder (Daydreamerâs Version)
Down the ladder:
Maybe Someday
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Posted: March 23, 2004 6:37 AM PST; Last modified: March 23, 2004 6:37 AM PSTWeighted score: 6.00853 Overall Rank: 1249 Comments:
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zodiac @ 152.31.228.13
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23-Mar-04/7:34 AM
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Great! Whose is the quoted voice? I can't find these lines anywhere (but guess Brautigan, Hemingway, or your own - not that it matters, but I'm curious.) So - your style always amazes me.
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zodiac @ 152.31.228.13
> zodiac
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23-Mar-04/7:34 AM
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I meant the rest of that comment. Just found it gushy and earnest for p/r.
"Kivi veereb"?
I like this one quite a bit - do we need the last line?
I presume the quote is something from Jean-Paul Sartre, but who cares? Wisdom will, in fact, encroach on belief, if you let it. Go ahead and build a wall as high as a statue to keep the stone from rolling, and keep your hand from your enemy's. Great!
Just to clear things up, the first verse is not a quote, I would have credited a quote. The marks were just to signify an outside voice.
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