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Pain (Free verse) by terbenaw
My soul is in chaos, my heart is in pain
I sit and I wonder if my life will ever change
But I know that it will remain the same
In times of sadness, I call upon the rain
Where I stand and poor my soul out in tears
Only the breeze listens as I let out my fears
I scream for help, but no one will hear
My vision's now hazy whereas it once was clear
Anguish and agony accompany me
And I stand helpless in a world in need
Stranded, trying to figure the best way to proceed
Praying and hoping that I will succeed
Faith is hard without any guidance
In a world where many have brains but are mindless
Where some have backbones and some are still spineless
And religion is seen as myths made timeless
Listen closely, hear my soul's cries
Heed my heartâs screams as my mind dies
Try to see the world as I see it through my eyes
See the cruelly distorted trees and grey somber skies
I move through life just trying to stay alive
On crime-filled streets thereâs nowhere to hide
A jungle in which salvation is my only guide
And I wonder every night, âHow long will I survive?â
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.905148
Overall Rank: 9788
Posted: March 22, 2004 9:25 AM PST; Last modified: February 25, 2006 5:21 PM PST
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Try to see the world as I see it through my eyes
This is undoubtedly the worst lne in the poem, You should either say
Try to see the world through me eyes.
or
Try to see the world as I see it.
But given how many people see it similarly you could try
Try and see the world how we see it, etc.