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Jesus Wept (Other) by coffeeangel316 Just as you are, I love you the same
Everlasting love is better than flames
Seeking my kingdom will warm your heart
United in the Gospel, of Matthew and Mark
Seek my word to defeat Satan's evil snares
Without it you will be in such deep despair
Eternal life is what I am offering to you
Plus love everlasting, I will see you through
Touch me now, I weep for you as I see you do
Up the ladder:
Grasping Smoke
Down the ladder:
Strings
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Posted: March 5, 2004 7:43 AM PST; Last modified: March 5, 2004 7:43 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.2980075 Overall Rank: 3703 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.114
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5-Mar-04/1:26 PM
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With this piece, you have balmilised a dumpling that is Beyond Thunderdome. It fails so utterly, that no amount constructive criticism could hoist it from the plunging U-bend to the giddy heights of a lingering death on the toilet bowl, smeared against the porcelain slopes like a squashed urchin. No my friend, this dropping is destined to remain below the waterline, where it shall wallow and sob in a state of appalling agony until the last days of its miserably short life are utterly spent. It's time to pull the chain and move on, lest the contemplation of one stool should hamper the coiling of t'other. Good try though! -10-
kinda funny
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