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Walter (Free verse) by Schrodinger's Cat
Needles of light stab through playful leaves, Gentle music played by a gentle breeze; Colors stand as a reminder of Summer’s end. Observe it all, be amazed by what you see; Do as I sometimes do, Learn from my mistakes. A lopsided friendship, junior and senior; Lessons taught, some learned. Intentional distance (to lessen the blow?), A sinister plan: For self alone the violent hand. The mist reaches up with tenuous fingers; A pallid sky, cold to view, not a breath to disturb black waters; Ice still lingers just inches below. Youth and innocence faded from the downward glance.

Up the ladder: Tears
Down the ladder: Epistemology (2nd draft)

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.8333335
Overall Rank: 1628
Posted: February 22, 2004 10:16 AM PST; Last modified: February 22, 2004 10:16 AM PST
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[n/a] horus8 @ 24.130.214.180 | 22-Feb-04/4:25 PM | Reply
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