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Winter Is Coming For Me (Lyric) by Goad
The winter is coming for me
A bower in the teeth of the wind
A hillock of snow and black ice
It comes with a grave in it's mouth
And I'm already cold at the edge
I have no reason to tell
Why I have blasphemed the sun
Why I have sought out the night
Then stood and laughed at the moon
Why I've been idle in air
I think I was born to a fear
That a great thing would slip from my grasp
Would shatter and turn every head
To the skittering silence it left
Leaving me barren, undone.
So I have watched a sun set
From every crossroad I found
And awoke every morning the same
In a wilderness starting again
And the winter is coming for me.
The winter is coming for me
A bower in the teeth of the wind
A hillock of snow and black ice
For the wanter and waster a grave
And I'm already cold at the edge
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.4482355
Overall Rank: 2946
Posted: January 18, 2004 1:01 PM PST; Last modified: January 18, 2004 1:01 PM PST
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i really dislike the entire second stanza, it feels very cliche compared to the rest of the piece
third stanza: barren feels too dramatic
i thought of this as a potential replacement when i read that line:
Leaving my horizon undone.
which leads nicely into the next stanza with the sun setting
also, nice refrain at the end
i think a lyric piece can be wonderful
and avoid cliché
anyway, why write jokes when you could write something great?