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Memoirs of a Monk II - Sacred Witness (Free verse) by Don-Quixote
Break bread of broken tablet
then sprinkle dust from the timeworn trunk
into my last glass of wine.
Loud nothings won't drift
since my mouth is shut-
golden words lost its luster.
A heedless monk tends
to his morning hangover-
letting liquor drip from
the divine tap.
Meaning has become liquescent-
its secrets drain into the gutter.
Some still lead the occult worship,
their voices only whispers, a riddle
which no longer has an answer.
My companion has sacrificed
pages from the good book,
to roll our herbal medication-
cures the headache.
The whores mirror reflects nothing-
we were deluded into thinking we had a face-
used its broken glass to pluck
our non compos mentis eye
from its socket.
It exists now as an olive,
in my martini glass- grapes eaten
lambs blood depleted- we now toast
the miserable end of salvation, amen.
Have we become piteous punks?
No, just silent observers;
a witness to moments repeated.
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8664
Posted: November 14, 2003 11:10 PM PST; Last modified: November 15, 2003 1:02 AM PST
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I like this - I would like it more without the half sentence after the last comma. -8-
well.. half sentences.. fuck, sometimes i got so much to say, that punctuation becomes an itch.
suggestion? because i hate toying with punctuation when im already slightly handicapped in that department.
"just silent observers;
a witness [of] moments repeated"
Accepted! >hands you a spare titanium quill<
Im a starving poet, and the cat stole my silver- i snatched the titanium from NASA, neato right? I think so anyway.
Glad you liked the delta - some folks round these parts don't take kindly to semicolons though, so - watch yer back...
but memory forgets its available at times.. but theres always a way- somehow, someday.