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Drunken Night

by Ataryu

Member since 2003 · Posted 4 Oct 2003 · 2 comments

Vision blurs, A bunch of slurs, Drank to much wine, Can’t walk the line. I've been cuffed, The back seats ruff, The windows open, And im a jumpin. Cars swirve by me, I fucked up my knee, Keep running for the river, Now it’s getting deeper To fucked to swim, The light is dim, No more air, This isn't fair. Hell or Heaven, That is the question, The thoughts flash by, Now I die.

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[9] New Life Drug 4-Oct-03/2:29 PM Reply
really simple and to the point and not confusing and I like it cuz it reminds me of a drunken night.
[7] richa 5-Oct-03/1:10 PM Reply
'Now I die' seems hyperbolic and a lot of the rhymes seem forced 'knee/me, swim dim'

Still fast flowing and not too painful