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Pin worms and cake. (Free verse) by baphomet Children come from all around.
Pin worm infestation is defiantly bound.
In a tight little warm room like Jews.
Their breaths fill the room like a toxic spew.
The victims are none but one, me.
Vicious bugs they have no pity.
15 out of 35 have the itching curse.
It can make you scratch till the day you
ride in a hurse.
As deadly as children with guns.
I will get it just like the nun.
If I get pin worms Iâll hunt the carrier down.
If you know him say goodbye, because heâll
never be found.
And cake . . .
Up the ladder:
F.R.O.G.
Down the ladder:
Strap On
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5714285
Posted: September 28, 2003 11:42 AM PDT; Last modified: September 28, 2003 11:42 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.615798 Overall Rank: 12450 Comments:
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?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.71
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28-Sep-03/5:30 PM
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15/35 = 3/7
weak, forced rhymes, very little substance. sounds juvenile. are you in seventh grade?
no im in the 6th.
asshole. who asked for your opion. anal bead.
actually, as far as who asked for my opinion, the poster of this poem did. That's why everybody posts here, right? to get the opinions of others. what a dumb thing to ask.
no need to be nasty. By the way, I checked the profile - said "10th grade"...so I was off by a year or three. Big woop. I pegged the juvenile. and that's OK. We all start somewhere. Kudos to the poster for being brave enough to swim in these waters.
You'll have to forgive my little brother. Sometimes he jumps on my computer when I'm not looking and says STUPID shit. Obviously, the real shardik, would never have said that. My apologies.
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