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The paths towards home (Free verse) by TheVoiceless
The journey has begun,
Homeward bound,
The course once traveled turned around.
Roads filled with others,
A mind consumed with unease,
Mellow yourself by questioning,
Whereâ¦
Where are all these cars going,
Whyâ¦
Why are they here on this round,
Whenâ¦
When will their path end.
And you travel.
Till your departure, you travel.
Onward blending in with the unknown,
The path you take the same as theirs,
Only yoursâ¦yours is known.
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I think I need help with the where...why...when... it explains a lot.
But I think the repeat of the words makes it drag on and lose a lot.
Any help would be great. Thanks.
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Posted: September 22, 2003 3:58 PM PDT; Last modified: September 22, 2003 3:58 PM PDT
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