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A Solitaire Rose (Free verse) by red A solitaire rose
that comes from my heart
so that our souls are never apart.
A single rose
for your eyes so divine,
that when I picked it, I wished they were mine.
A lonely rose
that comes from my soul
and winning your love is its ultimate goal.
Up the ladder:
You Say
Down the ladder:
resurgence
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Posted: September 20, 2003 9:24 AM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2003 9:24 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9403987 Overall Rank: 9062 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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red @ 200.64.190.146
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20-Sep-03/9:26 AM
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i wrote this about 10 years ago
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EAger to Offend @ 65.95.241.126
> red
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20-Sep-03/12:40 PM
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(X) Cliched excuse
[X] AABB rhyming scheme
[X] About romantic love [_] About poetry-writing [_] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] Arbitrary indentation [_] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but in the third person [X] Clerical errors [X] Cliched imagery (staring out of window, pits of despair) [X] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.) [X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments [_] Devoid of rhyme [_] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices [X] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery [_] Drug references [_] Elves, unicorns, etc. [_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits' [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] Melodramatic [X] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Overabundance of ellipses [_] Overuse of 'depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness, etc) [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Protagonist has a smug name [_] Rage against the machine [_] References to the author's 'social life' [_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimoniously moral [X] Sentimental [_] Self-pity [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Use of internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Vicarious wish fulfilment -9- 139 view(s)
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