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Breathe (Free verse) by Artemis745
A soft cool whisper
Closely heard, barely felt
An emotion coiling itself,
Strangling itself,
Enlivening itself,
Revitalizing feelings
Buried deep by outside shovels
One, two, three, breathe
Stat. We've got a live one here
Dead to the world but
Living inside, a heart attack
Of emotion killing the shell,
Giving birth to the soul.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.0715218
Overall Rank: 6558
Posted: September 15, 2003 6:33 AM PDT; Last modified: September 15, 2003 6:33 AM PDT
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I like that you picked one immage and developed it with CONSISTENCY.