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Free verse № 65214

Breathe

by Artemis745

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 Sep 2003 · 1 comment

A soft cool whisper Closely heard, barely felt An emotion coiling itself, Strangling itself, Enlivening itself, Revitalizing feelings Buried deep by outside shovels One, two, three, breathe Stat. We've got a live one here Dead to the world but Living inside, a heart attack Of emotion killing the shell, Giving birth to the soul.

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[8] Jill Stockinger 15-Sep-03/4:17 PM Reply
Nice image, enjoyed this!
I like that you picked one immage and developed it with CONSISTENCY.