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Free verse № 6480

Jim Shady.

Member since 2002 · Posted 29 Jul 2002 · 6 comments

I drink till I care no more. My head is shaking and my feet won't touch the floor. I'm felling like a soggy dream. I live inside this mental cage - wondering whether my emotions can be seen. The drugs can only help so much. Nothings going to change my mind. How could she do this to me? I've lost my mind and I don't care. Delightful to disastarous is such a short break. I thought I knew you - thought I was the only one that understood. Maybe its my hair...............

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6 comments

[1] Art Glocken 29-Jul-02/5:38 AM Reply
A good first effort - have you done a lot of work ? i'd like to see it. It would be nice if u would cheer up though i sense your at a loose end.
[1] Art Glocken 29-Jul-02/5:50 AM Reply
Absoloute shit.
[8] johnnyfontaine23 29-Jul-02/9:49 AM Reply
Maybe it is your hair, Is it a bit scraggly? or a bit like Gareth Gates'? or maybe Chris Waddle 1990 circa....who knows?..
[8] Mister Cakes 29-Jul-02/2:29 PM Reply
Tell me your sins
[n/a] The troubled sinner 30-Jul-02/5:29 AM Reply
I don't have enough time to tell you my sins from the last day - never mind any longer. I am truly a sinner.
[4] alexander 22-Aug-02/4:09 AM Reply
Yes its your hair, its in your eyes so you can't see to write properly