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Being Mute

Member since 2003 · Posted 12 Sep 2003 · 7 comments

Stand looking in on conversation, Understand, smile and nod. Nothing more can be done, For the voice is none. Blinking eyes flirt without sound, Happily beam a witty grin, Causing the start of what, What is about to begin? Winning them over without a word, Showing their every sound made was heard, The walls they echoed to ears well trained, Thoughts in head, there they remain. So bland a feeling, Not being able to sayâ¦ What you feel and think, Needing savior from an ego that consumes. Try handing tools to vocalize, Keep your pen, And your paper too. Unless the things I do intrigue you.

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7 comments

[n/a] deleted user 12-Sep-03/6:51 PM Reply

I am mute sometimes. But then I play the flute.

[n/a] TheVoiceless › deleted user 13-Sep-03/1:06 AM Reply

Let me explain one time,
The only sound I break is toot, toot, toot,
So don't make fun trying to be cute,
Or your brain from skull I will lute.

(Look I'm a poet and didn't know it too.)

Thanks for the comment had to give a little back towards ya.

[10] suprembeaner 13-Sep-03/1:08 AM Reply

we ar the knights who say ni.
very good yng chap.
10
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[n/a] TheVoiceless › suprembeaner 13-Sep-03/1:26 AM Reply

Thank you very much. I got the idea when I signed up for this site. Decided what I wanted my user name to be, then thought hey... Why don't I write a poem about the mute amongst society.
Again thanks for the comment and the vote.

[10] LuckyJoe 13-Sep-03/1:35 AM Reply

I like it. It really made me think. Took me in, put me there. I saw the images, feel the feelings. Keep up the good work.
I'd give more than 10 if I could.

[n/a] TheVoiceless › LuckyJoe 15-Sep-03/2:50 AM Reply

Thank you brother. To bad I'm the one that got you started in poetry huh? :P

[6] herbgirlofbirkenau 5-Jun-04/12:04 PM Reply

love the last stanza
there are some weak parts such as: "So bland a feeling,
Not being able to sayâ¦
What you feel and think,
Needing savior from an ego that consumes."

but improve the flow and the poem will improve alot.
good job.