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Art of Suffering (Free verse) by loneshadow29 Pale canvas running red
Giving life to the pain inside
Tearing at my flesh
Just as you tore into my heart
Ripping and clawing
Cutting away all the anguish
You have put me through
My life seeping from my wounds
Washing away all of the sorrow
Do you find enjoyment
In all my suffering?
Do you like watching
As my life falls apart?
Pulling out a silver dagger
Returning the mark of sorrow
To its rightful place
Tears rolling down my cheek
The pain so unbearable now
But paling in comparison
To the pain you put me through
As I gaze at my masterpiece
of pain and suffering
the agony of heartache given life
for all to see and know
staring at you with such distain
you like what youâve created?
Can you see my pain? Can you feel it?
Up the ladder:
a gin blossom blossoms
Down the ladder:
Misery
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Posted: August 12, 2003 9:40 PM PDT; Last modified: August 12, 2003 9:40 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10216 Comments:
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Caducus @ 62.105.119.105
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13-Aug-03/5:52 AM
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A mixed bag here. Its heartfelt and easy to relate too but it offers little imagination for such a saturated theme thats been done 1000s of times. I actually did like this though, not all poems need to be perfect, this says what it needs too with clarity and basic expression ....7
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