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the birth of venus (Free verse) by princesszoe
cloud girl shows her knickers to the world
why? asks the teacher
venus waves her doll at other girls
edges not defined, most boundaries out of time
the little minds grow slowly day on day
until miss cloud girl floats away
venus stays and tries another hand
of poker, and with dash of sober bland
tries to make it with a man
lets go her reigns and stable gains
no hedging bets at this late stage
chips fall to deep and bleeding red black age
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.865529
Overall Rank: 10353
Posted: August 4, 2003 11:18 PM PDT; Last modified: August 4, 2003 11:18 PM PDT
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this is the larva of a great one.