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Next Century (Free verse) by Birdpia
I used to love you each day and night
until I found the blue blue sky
Your love was hung upon a shining star
and it seemed so far
I used to miss you at the sunbathed beach
until I found the wide wide sea
Your tears flowed along the tidal water
and each wave was despair
Now each second passes quickly,
but who will notice?
And in the next 20 years, who will make you remember
that you left a guy alone one cold winter?
And in the next 20 years, who will make you remember
that you had a guy hold you one cold winter?
And in the next century,
who will write a love poem exactly like this
to a lover left in a heavy rain?
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.142857
Weighted score: 5.3073616
Overall Rank: 3628
Posted: July 15, 2003 11:59 PM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2003 5:09 AM PDT
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Some good points through I like the abrupt end to the first verse and second