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the rose layed on the barren grave (Free verse) by josh_5o The rose layed on the barren grave.
The lily floating on the slimy swamp.
The rain drop falling on the sun dried desert.
The melody heard by deaf ears.
The light seen by blind eyes.
The warmth felt by cold, trembling hands.
The map found by the lost soul.
The sunrise ending the lonesome night.
The faint voice heard in silence.
The God that was all this to me.
Up the ladder:
Wanna Be Porn Star.
Down the ladder:
Old Man Me
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Posted: July 19, 2002 9:54 AM PDT; Last modified: July 19, 2002 9:54 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.270016 Overall Rank: 13168 Comments:
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razorgrin @ 142.166.108.163
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19-Jul-02/12:00 PM
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Laid not layed.A barren grave would be...an empty hole?
laid... not layed, unless that was intentional.
Wow, look at that form!! Brillant poem!!
I'm seeing alot of 'the's ... Try to lower the number of them and start your lines... uh.. differently.. :-D
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