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Eyes (Free verse) by Jake
Looking deep into your eyes,
hopeing for a glimpse of your soul,
I see nothing.
A dark cloud hangs over,
Flashes shine though,
Is it part of the storm, or deeper?
I want to see the storm break.
See the light from deep inside,
finally set free to shine.
When the clouds do break,
you will light the room,
the sun will come out, the storm done.
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.25
Weighted score: 4.7913947
Overall Rank: 11230
Posted: May 24, 2003 10:34 PM PDT; Last modified: May 24, 2003 10:34 PM PDT
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The poem has a lot of depth and I think just needs a little tweeking.
Peace,